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I intend to write a book and wonder if you could read it

The book is about Sophia and Michael is in love with each other but can not be married to each other for Sophia is the princess and Michael is the garden master's son.
In the city it flows freer to Sophia in each dag.kungen have thanked NO 4 years to each freer to Sohpia not want to get married but now he can no longer say no, so he organized a triple battle of Sophia han.Micheal hear it and so here I have written

Under the deal månskenet meet the two pairs of love in the king's garden.
I heard that the king declared a contest on your hand, said young Michael.
It is because my father had no val.För every day, someone to ask my father for my hand and he can no longer say no to me, "said Sophia.
Why!
To order or later they will use violence and then the war to break out and I do not, she said
Fly with me when far away from any worries.
Unable to wherever we go, they will find us or later, she said.
Because they can not find us if we disappear far beyond the horizon.
I love you but what you say can get you to be hung, she said.
Please say yes, he said.
Yes, with a weak voice
So they decided to flee in two days and that they would meet each other here, but that they did not know was that the prince sans svurna patron heard every ord.Oavsett what they thought it was obliged to report to the king even if they thought they were sad to see.
 
The King may be out there and prohibits Michael to meet henne.Sophia think anything happened to him

Threefold fight begins

First tone ring tones and no one will win an unknown knight. The white knight
other competitions going on the trip, which
to win glory for Sophia doing good deeds.
3 fight is about, to answer a question while holding a ball that lights red when lying.
Threefold fight win white knight by some to be Michael.
some of the suitors are dissatisfied and wage war against riket.micheal and great here and loyal friends that he has been among the suitors, helping him to win the war but when he returns home so he may learn that while he was fighting so came the unknown Black Knight and Sophia took with them.
Michael travels to Black City to take her back. In his so rser he faces many ex dragon, black Elf and other magical creature and 12 fighters who work for the black knight.

There is more

Sum it up to me in 3 sentences and i'll tell you.

Is it written in a different language? cause some words are not familiar at all, making it unreadable for me

Love det!

The story is a little bit cliche, but if you clean it up a little and work on making the english a little more natural it could end up as a fine story.

You certainly need to work on the English and it does sound slightly familiar. But with effort and a bit of crafty ingenuity you can make it very good.

omg laggage.. triple post

double post

and this is just a overview of the book i am going to write in english

You all judge it while it is far to early in the making, as he says it is an overview, let him fini*beep* before you slate it..!

The king is a  fair man and he want a man worthy for his throne and his daughter so he wants to test them all. Yes you have right that is not very orignal because i read alot of books. I am a dreamer  and always been so i want to do something. To write a book is one of me dreams

sounds a bit too familiar really...I think someone else already published it xD

I want to see something original.  Have you guys ever seen the thousands of generic fantasy titles about kings and princesses and knights and wizards?  Any fantasy book these days will need something to stand out.

Michael, would you mind if I ask how old you are?  Writing is a hobby of mine too, has been for years now.  But a young writer can hardly hope to have their book published without massive alterations and revisions.

*coughRolePlayingForumcough*

double

Yes, that is much more acceptable..!

a 7/10 for effort..!